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ELA 5: Revising a Speech 13 Views
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Description:
Today we're learning about revision. And no, that's not what happens when Professor Trelawney has the same vision for a second time.
Transcript
- 00:05
[Dino and Coop singing]
- 00:13
Your teacher assigned you a speech two weeks ago. You chose a topic and came up with an [Two school kids in class]
- 00:18
argument. You did a bunch of research. You sat down and wrote out a draft of your entire [Girl working at a computer]
- 00:23
presentation. You read it to your grandmother to get an unbiased opinion. [Grandma sat with lots of cats]
- 00:26
You’re done, right? It’s finally ice cream time?
Full Transcript
- 00:29
Well... Almost. But not quite. [Ice cream van drives away]
- 00:31
There’s one last step you need to take to turn a good speech into a great one:
- 00:35
Revision and Practice. [Envelopes in the mail with revision and practice written on them]
- 00:37
Then it’ll be ice cream time. Double scoop. We promise. [Girl looks happy]
- 00:41
The amount of revision that needs to be done is going to vary from person to person and
- 00:45
speech to speech. Some speeches might only need a few little tweaks… [Guy finishes fixing a girls car]
- 00:48
While others might need a whole lot o’ help. [Guy looking unhappy next to his burning car]
- 00:50
But either way, revision is a necessary step. Necessary…like, “not optional.”
- 00:55
You can think about revision in two ways: Minor and Major. Minor revision is the nitpicky
- 01:01
stuff, like changing the order of your sentences… [Coop pointing at a blackboard]
- 01:03
…or the choice of words.
- 01:05
Even something as piddling as the addition of an adjective here or there.
- 01:08
There’s a huge difference between a figure in the hallway and a terrifying figure in [Boy in a school corridor as a black figure walks by]
- 01:12
the hallway. We know from experience. [Woman flies in on a wrecking ball]
- 01:13
So yeah… minor. But as you can see, even a small change can make a big difference.
- 01:18
On the other hand, major revision is, well, major. It might mean changing your thesis [Dino pointing at a blackboard]
- 01:23
or rewriting entire sections of the speech. Sometimes major revision means tossing out
- 01:27
what you’ve got and going back to square one. [Someone chucking balls into the trash]
- 01:30
Which can be painful, especially if you’re already on square nine or ten.
- 01:33
But even though starting over is hardly anybody’s idea of fun,
- 01:36
it’s sometimes the best thing you can do. [Girl burying her first draft]
- 01:39
To determine whether your speech needs major or minor revisions, first inspect it yourself.
- 01:43
Make sure there are no huge errors, and that you feel good about it overall. It should
- 01:47
give you a warm, fuzzy feeling and not a confused, weird one. [Girl hugging a teddy bear and girl hugging a bat]
- 01:51
Next, try delivering the speech – out loud – to someone who can give you feedback.
- 01:55
If the person listening totally understands every point you made and is now on board with
- 02:00
your proposal that all school lunches start including Snickers bars… [Girl giving presentation to a someone sat on the couch]
- 02:03
… then you might only have some minor revisions to make.
- 02:06
On the other hand, you’ll know there’s some major revision in your future if your
- 02:09
speech leaves your listener, um…unsatisfied. [Teacher looks unimpressed]
- 02:12
Ultimately, the best way to revise your speech is by practicing out loud whenever and
- 02:16
wherever possible. You can practice before you go to bed… [Girl brushing her teeth]
- 02:20
While taking a walk…
- 02:21
Or even in the shower.
- 02:22
But save that last option for short speeches only. There’s a water crisis, after all. [Girl waiting for the shower walks off]
- 02:27
Ultimately, revision and practice is about doing whatever it takes for you to feel comfortable
- 02:31
delivering a speech that will connect with an audience. [Girl smiling at the front of class]
- 02:33
Okay, okay, fine. You can have three scoops. [Girl gets her ice-cream]
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