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Think about how you would rewrite the following sentences according to the directions given, and then choose the best answer for each. Keep in mind that your revision should not change the meaning of the original sentence.

While Jane tends to procrastinate


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All right sy Writing bumpers another section for you modifying

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phrases closet logical transitions and a whole bunch of stuff

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Okay here we go Aurora is hard working and responsible

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whereas her sister jane tends to procrastinate Rewrite this thing

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with wild jane tends to procrastinate comma and dot dot

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dot Yeah okay well let's think about this Most of

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us will at some point or another procrastinate way were

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an am crashed in ator and then we got paid

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for crashed in ating so we turned however there are

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some rare folks who always managed to stay on top

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of everything This sentence shows a contrast between jane who

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pro crashed innate and aurora who does not what we

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bet their parents never bring up that fact at all

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In the original sense the word whereas signifies contrast the

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rewritten sense replaces whereas with while so we don't need

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to repeat whereas right between the remaining choices were looking

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for the one that includes her sister So the relationship

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between two girls isn't left out so the answer here

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is sea While jane tends to procrastinate her sister aurora

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does not she's awesome way Dont want to select an

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option that fails to mention important information about their relationship

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like in a and also nick's any option that repeats

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whereas got it that's it The answer is c her 00:01:25.207 --> [endTime] sister aurora shmoop

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