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Think about how you would rewrite the following sentences according to the directions given, and then choose the best answer for each. Keep in mind that your revision should not change the meaning of the original sentence.

Susannah is a nice but


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All right say writing bumpers another sentence right in your

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face Here Susannah is a nice girl but she is

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a bit flighty Rewrite this one Susannah isn't nice but

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what All right Oh suzanna don't be so flighty for

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we've come to lend a hand here with this sentence

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Don't you see Well to answer this question we had

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to let a bit hit the cutting room floor Sorry

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a bit and just keeping it real Choosing to go

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directly to flighty girl will leave us with susannah is

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a nice but flighty girl Yeah well this choice is

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simple and grammatically correct and it preserves the overall meaning

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of the original sentence so that's it we go with

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a and a choice that lets us keep a bit

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would have been preferable but neither she is nice but

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a bit flighty girl that's just weird nor she is

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a nice she is a bit flighty Yeah that more

01:03

dramatically Either She is a nice butt girl who is

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flighty Not only sounds weird but it doesn't mean anything

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unless well maybe had two teas in the butt there

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but we don't go there Okay so that's it it's 00:01:15.125 --> [endTime] a and we're flatly shmoop yeah

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