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PSAT 1.1 Reading Diagnostic. The main purpose of the first two paragraphs is to...what?
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PSAT 1.15 Writing Narrative Walkthrough. How would you change the underlined portion, if at all?
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Thank you We sneak and here's your shmoop du jour
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brought to you by the museum of modern art It's
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the only place where someone might vandalize some of the
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artwork and no one would notice All right check the
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passage Sorry we that we love modern art but some
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of it just like that soup can thing i don't
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get All right How would you change the underlying portion
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below If it all Yes i know i'm a philistine
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his brothers who were involved in founding museum on our
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new york What entrench an experimental buys in the right
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talking like a snooty new yorker there all right And
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here potential answers It was quite lovely all right We'll
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only once in our lives have we ever heard of
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sentence this long without a single comma or other punctuation
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And that was when a car salesman tried to sell
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us the latest prius in under thirty seconds without taking
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a breath It wasn't pretty so as much as the
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original sentence just spits it all out and lets us
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get on with our day We have a feeling there's
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probably something missing here since it's rockefeller's brothers who were
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involved in founding the museum We're probably going to need
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to find a way to segment that bit off from
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the rest of the sentence unless banks he came along
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and manually remove the commas to make some sort of
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statement right No banks Option c has decided to go
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with parentheses A valiant effort but wrong parentheses can be
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used to present information is an afterthought But the content
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here is providing valuable information that describes the brothers and
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why there might be some bias there So we need
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to make the claws more of a focal point Go
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back to sleep Santa will wake you if we media
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option d also Separates the claws this time with dashes
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another good attempt but using dashes here is probably too
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jarring for the flow of the sentence which otherwise trucks
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along rather smoothly Let's call this one plan b in
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case nothing better comes along Ah yes answer Choice b
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hits it on the nose Commas worked perfectly to separate
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this non restrictive clause They make it clear that the
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line is in reference to the brothers while not cluttering
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the sentence or disrupting the tone or rhythm Plus they're
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forty percent off this week Only it's a win win
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