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CAHSEE ELA 1.1 Writing Conventions
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CAHSEE ELA 1.1 Writing Conventions. How would you correct the following sentence, if it needs correcting at all?

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CAHSEE ELA 1.2 Writing Conventions
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CAHSEE ELA 1.2 Writing Conventions. How would you correct the following sentence, if it needs correcting at all?

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CAHSEE ELA 1.3 Writing Conventions
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CAHSEE ELA 1.3 Writing Conventions. How would you correct the following sentence, if it needs correcting at all?

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CAHSEE ELA 4.2 Writing Conventions. How would you correct this sentence, if at all?

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Sorry And here's your shmoop du jour brought to you

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by marketing our figures say this one's gonna sell which

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answer best fills in the blanks Angeline works in marketing

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setting up displays ordering products and trains new staff And

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here the potential answers way have here is a problem

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with parallel structure a rule that tells us to use

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the same pattern of words throughout a sins It's good

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rule because that makes sure things sound equally important and

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generally helps us avoid wonky lopsidedness The trouble with this

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particular sense is that the list starts out with a

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jared that's that i n g thing setting up displays

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Then it goes on to another jerry and ordering products

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and then it randomly ends with trains new staff which

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isn't a jared at all Where is the i n

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g baby Even if we've never heard of a jared

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which is a verbal construction that functions is a noun

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It's easy to find the wonky nous that's upsetting the

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parallel structure here It just feels weird to have only

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one verb in the sentence without an i n g

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ending Now all we have to do is look for

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the answer that has an i n g ending for

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been list Well we've already established that the original sense

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is wrong So there goes choice d they can go

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to because it uses sets and trains and randomly throws

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ordering in the middle You're probably way ahead of us

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at this point But while we're at it let's also

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cross off c starting the list with setting and then

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continuing it with quarters and trains upsets the parallel structure

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on believe us when we say that bad things happen

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when parallel structure gets upset not pretty Option b is

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the only one that keeps its structure parallel List is

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full of nothing but i n g verbs as faras

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the eye can see way prefer crystal blue ocean disappearing 00:01:47.738 --> [endTime] into the writhe

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