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CAHSEE ELA 1.1 Writing Conventions. How would you correct the following sentence, if it needs correcting at all?
CAHSEE ELA 1.2 Writing Conventions. How would you correct the following sentence, if it needs correcting at all?
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CAHSEE ELA 1.4 Writing Conventions. Which sentence would provide additional support that fairy tales were not intended to be ideal worlds?
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Sorry And here's your shmoop du jour brought to you
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by violent fairy tales Is your kid too well adjusted
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Well try brothers grimm and see what that does to
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the following passage Read stories But even santa claus with
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being here about it all right Which sentence would provide
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additional support that fairy tales were not intended to be
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ideal worlds and hear the potential answers investor plain and
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children listen locals person mentioned quite graphic All right well
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the name of the game here is credibility The best
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answer is going to come from some legit source which
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helps the author hammer the main point home Option b
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doesn't even come close It's not citing any kind of
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source All we have is the author's word The children
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back in the day understood the warnings of fairy tales
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Now if the author brought in children from a time
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machine in the past and then interviewed them well that
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would be a different story but not the case here
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So bye Choi see makes the same mistake Is b
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it's just the author telling us that the fairy tales
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had more impact because they were local Well we're not
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saying that the author doesn't know what he or she
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is talking about but we need something a little more
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substantial than just a local On top of that whole
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issue c is extra wrong because the point it makes
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has nothing to do with the reason fairy tales were
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not intended to show nice happy world We're looking for
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solid evidence of a dark state of fairy tales before
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disney came along and painted a smile on every fairies
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face wow what would happen if we put a hard
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core old school fairy in an iron cage match with
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a sparkly disney fairy We shell out for the pay
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per view okay option d does make a good point
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The tarantino like violence of old fairy tales is pretty
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solid evidence that the stories weren't meant to show what
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we think of now as storybook world This answer has
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a problem though we have no idea who the person
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who mentions this point is so it could be a
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fairytale expert or it could be the author's senile aunt
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mabel we just don't know Well option a fixes the
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problem by saying that a professor is the one presenting
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the evidence professor Educated phd school right This would be
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a stronger if we knew who the professor is and
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what his or her credentials are If this professor's phd
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was in basket weaving while then his heir opinion on
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fairytales isn't much more valid than aunt mabel's Still even
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though answer isn't perfect it's the best we got it's
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kind of like the last deform cupcake in the pan
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might not be perfect but it's Not like we're not 00:02:37.208 --> [endTime] going to eat it Ah
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