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Okay Essay writing shmoop er's were over halfway in this

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section you know let's do a little dance Theo author

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is considering adding the following sentence to the end of

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paragraph four should the sentence be added to your sentence

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and that is one reason why i believe education No

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he clearly needs more Is the civil rights issue of

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our generation and why arts education remains so critical to

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leveling the playing field of opportunity Let's find the fourth

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paragraph One two three four here we go Right it's

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right there So would we add that at the end

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there for see little six there they kind of give

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you a ticket for privileged elite children from disadvantaged backgrounds

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for english language learners or instant with disabilities often do

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not get the enrichment of affluence anywhere except at school

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And then do we add this sentence here This and

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that is one reason why well without this additional sentence

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paragraph for really does float awkwardly in the middle of

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the essay Sure the fact that many children get opportunities

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at school that they wouldn't have at home is a

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relevant detail that why included adding this sentence explains that

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this is a big reason the writer supports arts education

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why he's advocating for it in the first place and

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it kind of anchors the perfected he has is like

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seeing it through the lenses of those who don't have

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and which they did alright what of the wrong answers

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Let's Just go through that so we could do the

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superior dance The overall theme of the s a is

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that a well rounded curriculum that includes the arts is

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important it's important So all students have the same opportunities

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for success Well maybe maybe do we really believe that

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therefore this sentence elaborate ce on the theme of the

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essay at least the essay believe that rather than you

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know distract from so get rid of a there in

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the next paragraph the author will use eye or be

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there again So it's actually helpful to be used into

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that personal recollection with the appearance of eye in this

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paragraph though the sentence calls arts education a civil rights

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issue Well it doesn't explain why it's a civil rights

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issue just kind of comes out of nowhere So yeah

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all those air out it's not a b or c

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see it's d because it reinforces the reason the author

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thinks the topic of his essay is important So that's 00:02:09.598 --> [endTime] it Go ahead you

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