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ELA 5: Reviewing Your Paragraphs 73 Views
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Review, revise, recycle, reuse...we're getting the feeling re-thinging things is a good idea in general. Make sure to re-watch this video over and over until you've got it down. And maybe even a few more times. You know, just to be safe.
Transcript
- 00:04
[Coop and Dino singing]
- 00:13
Skip has never been very good at reviewing his work.
- 00:16
Hm…maybe that’s why they call him “Skip.” [Skip sat at his desk with his thumbs up]
- 00:18
Okay, so…that’s just his given name, but…some coincidence, right?
- 00:22
Anyway…Skip keeps getting in trouble because he refuses to take a little extra time to
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- 00:26
make sure his work is in tip-top shape. [Skip handing over his work]
- 00:27
The result? Some very sloppy paragraphs.
- 00:30
As Skip well knows, in paragraphs, all sentences point back to the main idea.
- 00:35
At least…they should.
- 00:36
That's what it means when we say that effective paragraphs have unity. [Coop pointing to effective paragraphs on a chalkboard]
- 00:39
Otherwise, you’re just throwing a bunch of random stuff in there.
- 00:42
That works well for a stew…not so much for a paragraph. [Mother preparing a stew for Skip]
- 00:45
But…Skip can’t be bothered. After all, there are video games to be played, and sleep [Skip playing video games]
- 00:49
to be…slept. Too bad he can’t just put in a tiny bit of effort…
- 00:52
because putting together an effective paragraph really isn’t that tough!
- 00:56
The only thing that matters is that the sentences point back to the main idea. [Yellow arrows pointing to the main idea of a paragraph]
- 00:59
They either develop the idea…i.e. expand on it…
- 01:02
or support the idea…i.e. back it up with examples or evidence.
- 01:06
And yeah…just one main idea per paragraph, please…
- 01:09
Skip is going to continue to struggle until he realizes that the best writing is writing [Skip stuck behind in class and girls walks away]
- 01:14
that has been edited. That doesn’t just mean changing the font
- 01:17
to “Arial,” Skip. Hate to break it to you, but you need to actually [Skip using a PC]
- 01:21
review and revise your paragraphs to get them into peak condition.
- 01:24
Okay, so Skip has finally decided to turn over a new leaf.
- 01:28
From now on, he’s going to make sure that each paragraph contains only sentences that [Skip writing a new paragraph]
- 01:32
relate to the main idea of that paragraph. If it doesn’t…he’ll edit it out.
- 01:37
In fact, Skip sorta gets into the editing groove.
- 01:39
If he’d known crossing things out was this much fun, he would have started months ago. [Poster with can scribbled out and replaced with the word 'may']
- 01:44
Now he just has to learn where to draw the line...
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